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In the mirror stands a beautiful
Girl.
She
smiles and waves with
grace and poise.
A satin black dress
hugs every curve,
winding down
Her
body
like a boa constrictor
wraps around its favourite meal.
She
gives a little show,
turning on a heal.
One smooth twirl.
But the fabric falls too quickly,
revealing
Her
secrets.
Arriving at the party
She's
excited to mingle.
Her
eyes follow the moving bodies.
She
longs to fit in
with the other curves.
Her
hips begin to sway.
She
closes
Her
eyes,
begging for the music
to take
Her
away.
A tap on
Her
shoulder
gives
Her
a fright.
She
turns to see
the eyes of fate.
A
Boy
is smiling,
"can it be at me?"
He
offers
His
hand
to the
Girl
in black.
The music still plays
and
She
begins to swoon.
The
Boy
holding
Her
now,
has no clue.
Their bodies move as one
as the dance carries on.
The sun begins to set
and the stars begin to break.
The
Girl
twirls outside,
with the
Boy
just behind.
He
grabs
Her
hand
and they start to dance,
one last time.
She's
lost in the moment.
Time is standing still.
The moon glows brighter
As the
Boy
holds
Her
close.
Looking into
His
eyes,
She
parts
Her
lips.
Wanting to release words
of passion
and utter bliss.
No sound escapes
Her
mouth,
instead a clock
chimes loudly.
"no"
She
whispers softly.
Her
delicate hands
pick up the folds
of
Her
dress.
Away
She
runs,
counting in
Her
head.

One.
She
flees into the trees.
Two.
She's
filled with unease.
Three.
Her
skin becomes rough .
Four.
Her
face sprouts scruff.
Five.
Her
chest feels lighter.
Six.
Her
dress becomes tighter.
Seven.
Her
shoes no longer fit.
Eight.
Her
dress begins to rip.
Nine.
Her
long hair begins to fall.
Ten.
She's
lost it all.
Eleven.
She
Thumps ungracefully on to the ground.
Twelve.
His
cries in to the night
don't make
a sound.
My Freaky Darlings,

This is my own version of a Cinderella story. I'm doing a series inspired by being transgender. This is my kick off, a very crappy poem! This is my work in progress, I want to refine it, probably make it rhyme throughout the whole thing and give it a nicer look. I just thought for now I would put this one up.
It's definitely not my best work but I love the meaning.

-Blackbird :jsenn:

Photo by :iconthepsychesrapture:

Photo link: [link] (couldn't get the thumb to work)

EDIT
I didn't think this poem would get so big! Thank you to everyone who favourited or added it to a collection, and thank you for all the comments. I love hearing from people (: If I can move someone in their heart there is no better reward than that for something I've written~ so thank you everyone!
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LightsOnLuna Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You were featured in my journal!
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macsys Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
No revision necessary. It was incredibly well written and very enticing. I could feel the hearts beating while reading, the surest sign of intensity in any literary world. Well done.! 
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lashdragon Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist
Oh good god... So many feels. :'(
This poem is beautiful. It really tugs at the heartstrings of those who know what its like to hope to appear as who they really are, only to have there dreams crushed by the cruelty of fate.
Excellent work.
Can't' wait to see more.
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner May 6, 2013   Writer
That is absolutely amazing! Someone really needs to make this into a movie, because it'd be just an amazing movie!
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BlackFaeBird Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
why thank you so much. (:
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SavvyRed Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing!
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BlackFaeBird Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you!
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SavvyRed Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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nanashit Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow
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Itti Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Have you done any more in the series yet?
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